Opinion Paragraph

Do you like to smoke at public spaces?
 

 Involuntary smoking(간접흡연) is the government's must-solved problem. I think government should regulate smoking at public spaces, because non-smokers have a right to breathe in clean air. Also, Smoke from cigarettes is harmful to people who breathe it in indirectly. According to doopedia, person who doesn't smoke, but has smoking spouse has a higher probability to lung cancer and heart disease more than their spouse. Economic loss caused by smoking is also great problem to society. In Korea, according to study investigated by Institute of Population & Health Service Research at Yonsei University in 1995, expenses to medical treatment would be 2 trillion won, and expenses which are used to solve environmental pollution made by smoke from cigarettes would be 3 trillion won. Now the expenses will cost more, because 20 years passed. To sum up, government should regulate smoking at public spaces for public welfare.

Involuntary Smoking, Photo, E. (n.d.).Chosunmedia. Retrieved December 4, 2015.

#Credit for reason no.1

간접흡연. (n.d.). Retrieved December 4, 2015,
from http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=1222656&cid=40942&categoryId=32749

#Credit for reason no.2

흡연으로 인한 질병과 환경피해. (2010, November 26).
 Retrieved December 4, 2015, from http://www.happycampus.com/doc/11098245

Blog Post #5

 

Learning from Blog Post

 

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Through blog posting, I've learned that writing is a diffucult one. For writing, I have to know about grammar, citation, and so on. It was very difficult and hard for me to know and apply all those things in writing. It is still difficult to write a paragraph precisely, but at least, I know about grammar or citation rules. This means that I have more opportunities and availabilities to be a good writer, and I satisfy with this. I've learned not only academic writing rules,but also confidence in writing.

Learning from Comments

 

     Through blog posting, I learned two things. First, the comments from others taught me that I sometimes forgot to use verb. Whenever I write my first draft, I examine my writing at least twice, but many students who read my paragraph notice me about verb. Thanks to those comments, I check out my paragraph -especially verb- more than twice. Second, from the comments that I have posted on to others, I learned that many students start a sentence with "FAN BOYS". I was one of them, and many students are still have some mistakes with it. Gary said, "Do not start a sentence with FAN BOYS",so we have to keep it on our mind.

Blog Post #3

Full Of Happiness, Everland!

Everland gives happiness to people who visit there with three main points. First, Everland is easy and inexpensive to access. From Seoul and Gyeonggi-do, many buses and subways are running which are clean and comfortable. There are many buses going to Everland directly, and the subway is easy to transfer at Giheung Station. Their fare is also reasonable -the maximum fare of bus and subway is about 3,000 won-, so most people who want to use public transportation are satisfied with the fare. Second, the Everland is furnished with clean amenities and great services. If you go to the Everland, you can see the roads, toilets, and other facilities are clean. The cleanliness gives us a feeling such as respectations. Great services are observed from every staff in Everland. All staffs in Everland are kind and always smiling. You can see that kindness from every ride facilities' staffs who greet us in front of an attraction. At last, Everland has many kinds of entertainments. Everland is famous with many ride facilities which is about 30. Everland also changes its theme every season, and it makes people want to visit again. According to the Hangukgyeongje article, Everland got first prize from general satisfactions such as fare, convenience, and services for 21 years, and the customers said that they want to visit again. Changeing themes, for example, in spring Everland shows off its Rose Garden, and in fall they make a Halloween Party. Everland has lots of restaurants, snack bars, and so on..., so people can enjoy some snacks whenever they want to. Memorial shop is also famous in Everland. It gives people pleasure memories with stuffs that carved with symbols of Everland. In conclusion, these three main points are factors that people receive happiness from Everland.

 

 

 

 

     Untitled Image, Photo, E. (n.d.). EVERLAND RESORT. Retrieved October 9, 2015.

 

 

 

 

김예은.(2015).View of Everland Garden [This photo was taken by me.]
 Retrieved from my computer on October 9, 2015.

Article reference

 지은, 정. (2015, October 13). [2015 산업별 고객 만족도(KCSI)]. 한국경제, p. 1. Retrieved October 16, 2015, from http://www.hankyung.com/news/app/newsview.php?aid=2015101207411

Blog post #2

An Ideal Place For My Concentration

 

An ideal place for me to concentrate or focus should be quiet, dark, and stimulant. First, I'm very sensitive to the sound, so I can't focus when the place is noisy, or someone is talking. Since that problem, I prefer to be in narrow and quiet place. Second, my ideal place should be dark. As I said, I can concentrate on when the place is quiet, and usually my surroundings are quiet at night. So whenever I want to concentrate on something, as you can see in the picture, I make my place totally dark and leave just a ray of light. At last, the most important thing for my concentration is that my place should be stimulant. If you see the picture, there are five printed pictures on the wall and the chalkboard, which is about 8 inch, beneath the printed pictures. Stimulant, which I said, means something that stimulates me to move forward for my dream. For example, in my case, I printed some places that I want to go next year and the pictures of flight attendants whom I want to be. And on the chalkboard, I wrote down my bucket-list and some famous sayings that keep stimulating me when I fall into a slump. By all mean,  place with these three condition is my own ideal place for concentration.

 

 

 

 

 

Picture Of An Ideal Place, taken by me.

Blog Post#1

 

Great Influences Of Suwon

 

 

Suwon has some influences on my life. I will tell you just two cases of many influences. First, I learn the preciousness of Traditions from Suwon. Since my house is located near Hwaseong, which is famous for Korean Traditional Castle, I experience the beauty and the preciousness of Traditional heritages. Second, I learn the pleasure of walking from Suwon. There are many places where I can take a walk. Seoho Lake, Manseok Park, and Sukji Park are some examples. They are beautiful and well organized so everytime I get stressed, I go to those parks(or lake) and take a walk.Whenever I walk there, worries blow away.

In short, Suwon has many positive effects on my daily life.