An Ideal Place For My Concentration
An ideal place for me to concentrate or focus should be quiet, dark, and stimulant. First, I'm very sensitive to the sound, so I can't focus when the place is noisy, or someone is talking. Since that problem, I prefer to be in narrow and quiet place. Second, my ideal place should be dark. As I said, I can concentrate on when the place is quiet, and usually my surroundings are quiet at night. So whenever I want to concentrate on something, as you can see in the picture, I make my place totally dark and leave just a ray of light. At last, the most important thing for my concentration is that my place should be stimulant. If you see the picture, there are five printed pictures on the wall and the chalkboard, which is about 8 inch, beneath the printed pictures. Stimulant, which I said, means something that stimulates me to move forward for my dream. For example, in my case, I printed some places that I want to go next year and the pictures of flight attendants whom I want to be. And on the chalkboard, I wrote down my bucket-list and some famous sayings that keep stimulating me when I fall into a slump. By all mean, place with these three condition is my own ideal place for concentration.
Picture Of An Ideal Place, taken by me.
Hello Ye-Eun,
답글삭제I was able to learn how quiet, dark, and stimulant place can affect your studying skills! Mine is pretty different from yours; I prefer studying in a noisy and bright place. I still don't understand how I became to study in such environment, but I feel most suited and relaxed in it. (:
By the way, I just found small errors while I was reading your paragraph. I suggest that you can add a word "is," after the 'my concentration' in the seventh sentence of the paragraph. Since you are talking about the most important thing for concentration, there should be a singular form of a be-verb that can completely describe the "thing" mentioned above. Lastly, I suggest you to change the word "stimulate" to "stimulates" in the tenth sentence. Because you have used the word, 'something' to explain what the word stimulant is about, you would want to make the verb into singular form. I hope my suggestions can be helpful to you! (:
Have nice holidays,
So Young Yoon
Hi Ye-Eun,
답글삭제What a paragraph you wrote there. I can totally understand what your ideal place is. I like bright than the dark for my studying. My eyes get tried in dark places. Anyway, about your concluding sentence, I want to fix it because that sentence is focus on the three points not the place. 'By all mean, place with these three condition is my ideal place to study.' is more focus on the place, or you can leave your last sentence and simple add up what I just wrote. I think second choice is better. I hope this is helpful to you.
Have a nice day,
Hyeonmin Kim
Hello Ye-Eun,
답글삭제I agree your all opinion. I like dark, silent place too. Also, I always have a stimulant thing(my family picture). Your room looks very beautiful and your paragraph is too. I hope you achieve the dream! Good luck
Have a nice day,
Jin Hyeok
Hi Yeeun,
답글삭제It is nice to post picture together. Because of your picture and detailed explanation, I could understand well your chalkboard and 5 pictures. I will post picture together in final draft like you!
Thank you,
Moonju